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My preconceived thoughts before even reading a page of this books are that one, this is a very naughty novel. Two, it supposed to be ‘Twilight’ fan-fiction according to this GalleyCat article. Three, the editing is supposed to be poor and four, there are supposed to be a lot of Brit sayings even though it is based in the States. I’m willing to look past all those…
My first thought is that the speech and writing is very formal. Here is an example on the 2nd page, where Ana is thinking about her friend Kate, “She’s articulate, strong, persuasive, argumentative, beautiful – and she’s my dearest, dearest friend.” But I’m instantly taken in by the inner struggle with Anastasia’s fear of doing the interview but the loyalty she has for her friend.
Besides the locale the first bit of Twihard culpability rears its head with the fact that Ana is quite clumsy. She literally tumbles into Grey’s office and curses her clumsiness.
“I push open the door and stumble through, tripping over my own feet and failling headfirst into the office.
Double crap–me and my two left feet!”
I already find Ana likeable because of this though. She’s rather hard on herself, a loner and not one to fit in well, but I seem to be enjoying her inner snark. The Blonde One & Blonde Two references crack me up, even though it is rather banal, but corporate drones crack me up.
The second obvious Edwardness rears it’s head right after Ana’s clumsiness with the description of “long-fingered” “copper-colored hair”(ed), Christian Grey. Yet, that is where the ‘Twilight’ comparisons really end for me. Christian while enigmatic like our favorite sparkly vampire is much more, well Alpha. This is the powerful version of that particular character, if this is how he was meant to be crafted. If Edward were a man, so-to-speak instead of a 17/100 year old virgin, I’m guessing he could might be Christian Grey.
Overall I liked the interaction between the two characters. Anastasia was a bit awkward, but it was endearing to me instead of aggravating and pitying. And I loved how they called each other by their first names in goodbyes at the end. Almost like a challenge. Can’t wait for Chapter Two…
My favorite parts:
Grey: “I have varied interests, Miss Steele.” A ghost of a smile touches his lips. “Very varied.” And for some reason, I’m confounded and heated by his steady gaze. His eyes are alight with some wicked thought.
Anastasia: “I really need to get out of here. When I turn to look at him, he’s gazing at me and leaning against the doorway beside the elevator with one hand on the wall. He really is very, very good-looking. It’s unnerving.
“‘Anastasia,’ he says as a farewell.
“‘Christian,’ I reply. And mercifully, the doors close.”
As you can tell from the quotes, not the best of writing, but the character interplay is well done. And Chapter One was a keeper.
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